I’ve just finished reading The Beast Within by Lisa Renee Jones.
The story isn’t bad, but the writing really grated on me. I don’t mean I hated it, I did finish the book, but I do mean the writing jarred me. A lot. In many places.
Lisa — if you ever trip over this blog post for whatever reason… Please never again use "The fire of desire." in any and all future writing.
It rhymes for Gods sake, at a point where it’s jarring as hell. Those few words ruined the mood for me every time — and you’re so fond of it, I found it three times. Slap your copyeditor for me.
Anyway. It’s one of those things.
Rhyming when your characters are about to jump each others bones… no.
Don’t. PLEASE don’t.

*shudder*

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