You’re a poet and didn’t know it
in Authors, Books, The Written Word in Authors, Books, The Written WordI’ve just finished reading The Beast Within by Lisa Renee Jones.
The story isn’t bad, but the writing really grated on me. I don’t mean I hated it, I did finish the book, but I do mean the writing jarred me. A lot. In many places.
Lisa — if you ever trip over this blog post for whatever reason… Please never again use "The fire of desire." in any and all future writing.
It rhymes for Gods sake, at a point where it’s jarring as hell. Those few words ruined the mood for me every time — and you’re so fond of it, I found it three times. Slap your copyeditor for me.
Anyway. It’s one of those things.
Rhyming when your characters are about to jump each others bones… no.
Don’t. PLEASE don’t.
*shudder*
Tags: Beast Within, fire of desire, Lisa Renee Jones, mood, rhyming
